Draft of Rhetorical Analysis

In my draft, my biggest concern is whether or not I did a thorough enough analysis. I would love to get some feedback about whether or not I included enough rhetorical strategies. If I did, is my analysis in-depth enough? Also, if any words are used too much or my sentences are too similarly formatted, please let me know.

Collins, Jane. "thank you." Uploaded 10/27/09 via Flickr.
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Don't hesitate to be critical or nit-picky. I would rather that than get feedback that doesn't help me improve my draft.

Here is my Project 2 essay draft!