Revised Conclusion

I am still unsure about which conclusion is more usable. While the revised conclusion caters more to the audience and the purpose of our essay, I am still fond of the original. As I revise, maybe I can find an effective way to blend the two into one super amazing conclusion. 

Original Conclusion

Jessica Samakow, in having a knowledgeable and strongly opinionated audience, uses statistics and experts’ opinions to support her argument against the use of physical punishment. Given her career writing for HuffPost Parents and her more liberal audience, she is able to cater her article to appeal directly to her readers. Although her article is, for the most part, well articulated, it is unlikely that it will achieve much in the way of resolving the controversy. Parents are resistant to having their methods questioned, and they believe they know what is best for their children. Even though there is ample evidence that proves that spanking is harmful to kids’ mental health and wellbeing, there will continue to be parents who believe in its effectiveness. Regardless of her article’s future impact, Samakow’s use of rhetoric forms a coherent argument that may, on a small scale, convince parents to find an alternate way to punish their children for their wrongdoings.

Revised/Reworked Conclusion

As evidenced by Adrian Peterson being freed from the child abuse charges, it is unlikely that any one event will have a huge impact on this controversy. However, strong examples of rhetoric can have a great influence on society, more so than a scandal involving a football player. In using powerful rhetorical strategies, Samakow creates an article that, especially due to the emotion it evokes, could have a real impact on the debate over spanking. As a student, being able to analyze both the effectiveness of an example of rhetoric and its implications on the future is incredibly important to success in college and the world beyond.